Kristy’s Concussion: A Scene from My New Novel, SHAKEN: Megan Rapinoe and a Knife

Here’s a paragraph and then a quick scene that takes place soon after Kristy suffers a concussion while playing soccer. It’s the “inciting event” that propels the novel forward.

 

Light breaks through the curtains, bringing with it a sharp pain to her forehead. Kristy imagines a jagged crack running from eyebrow to hairline. She can’t bear to call out her mother’s name. So she waits, eyes squeezed shut, pillow over her face, like an aphid on the underside of a leaf. A black dot of silence. She’ll be better soon. As good as new. Running the field and scoring goals. This is the worst of it. Yes, she tells Megan Rapinoe, who is staring back at Kristy from a soccer poster on the wall, this is the very worst. 

It was the first time Kristy was alone for the day in an empty house. No problem. She’d just take it slow, recover. 

That was the word, over and over, recover. 

“That’s your job now,” her father advised. “Just get better, a little bit better each day.” 

Sure. Okay. 

But how do you do that when your head feels like it’s covered with bubble wrap? When your brain doesn’t feel right? When it hurts to think? Every time Kristy turned her head, it took an extra second for her eyes to focus. For a moment, it’s just blur. 

Kristy padded softly downstairs, moved into the kitchen, slid two pieces of cinnamon raisin bread into the toaster. The room smelled like coffee and eggs and it turned her stomach. There were a few dishes in the sink and for some reason this unsettled her. But why? Who cares? She stood by the counter holding a knife. 

Time passed. She blinked. Looked down.

A knife was in her right hand.

There was a window above the sink overlooking the backyard. Trees, grass, the deck. Leaves beginning to change colors, drop down to the ground. No action at the bird feeder. It was empty, anyway. No seed. 

So this was what it was like to stay home on a school day. For two weeks straight. The big echoing house. The world of nothingness outside. A voice in her head asked, Is it empty, or full of nothing? 

Oh, how very zen. 

Kristy noticed that the faucet was running. She shut it off. 

Why was a knife in her right hand? 

The smell of cinnamon. And something else—a burnt, bitter aroma. Kristy remembered the toaster, the toast, the butter, and the reason for the knife. She wasn’t hungry anymore. Didn’t bother, even, to remove the blackened bread from the toaster. It could wait. It could all wait. She placed the butter knife on the counter and headed back upstairs. The bed beckoned. 

Tomorrow, she thought. Tomorrow will be better. 

This Saturday the 19th: The Morristown Festival of Books!

Another weekend, another children’s book festival. If you are in the area, please stop by and say hello!

The details:

The Morristown Festival of Books’ KidFest authors will return from 10:30 a.m. to 4 p.m. on Saturday, Oct. 19, rain or shine, to meet visitors while selling and personally signing books, on the lawn of St. Peter’s Church, 70 Maple Avenue, in historic downtown Morristown, NJ.

 

WHERE KIDS & AUTHORS MEET! 

The Right Book at the Right Time: Halloween Edition

As a parent, I always felt that Halloween was insane. Our kids would go off trick-or-treating, gather up ridiculous amounts of candy, and we’d stress about them actually eating it. In fact, we made up a whole story where they would “trade in” their candy — leaving it out for the Great Pumpkin — and discover a new toy or gift the next morning. The epic wastefulness of it all! What’s better, you might ask? My new “Scary Tales” collection. Three full book-length stories in one (cheap!) paperback compilation. 304 pages for grades 3-6, and no one dies, wonderfully illustrated by the great Iacopo Bruno. Only $8.99 and NO CAVITIES!

Halloween before my time: The three oldest from my family, Barbara, Neal, and Billy. America in the 1950s.

 

My two youngest, Maggie and Gavin, close to 20 years ago. Let’s go, Mets!

Whatever really happened to all that candy, I wonder? I do like a frozen mini Milky Way bar. Sue me.

This Sunday the 13th: THE WARWICK CHILDREN’S BOOK FESTIVAL

 

This SUNDAY, the 13th, I’ll be at the Warwick Children’s Book Festival along with a great number of talented authors and illustrators. Warwick is such a sweet little town, with great shops and restaurants, especially beautiful this time of year. Worth a road trip. And the festival is great fun, too. If you do come, please stop by and say hello! For full details, stomp on this

I’ll be signing any number of books, old favorites and new, including these titles just published in 2024 . . . 

           

 

COME ON OUT & SUPPORT LITERACY,

SUPPORT THE ARTS,

and SHARE the LOVE of READING

with YOUNG READERS!

Edits: The Last Few Lines of BEFORE YOU GO

I came across this document from my only true YA novel, Before You Go (Macmillan, 2012), which even got a kind review in The New York Times of all places, and landed with a thud in the marketplace. My idea for this book came when I was confronted by the Pink Wall of a YA display in a bookstore. It just seemed so extremely female-dominated. So I decided to try to enter that world from a male perspective. I always strongly disliked the cover. But the book’s shortcomings in the market surely has more to do with my own failings, or predilections, as a writer. What I liked, what I tried to do, did not fulfill the desires of the reading audience.

I guess, I don’t know. Too slow, possibly. Too male? That’s what I was trying to do. 

We go through these questions, as writers, after books die on the vine. We wonder why and search for answers. And if you are me, the easiest and most obvious target — once we move past the disappointing cover and the harsh publishing world where almost nothing gets promoted vigorously — is me. The fault is mine. It might be as simple as what I like, in this case, is not what the majority of readers wanted.

Anyway, I still like the book a lot, always have.

This snippet (below) is from the final revision I did in the copyediting process. The book was typeset and just about ready to go to press. I was still fiddling with words, working that last scene, Jude at Jones Beach, alone, waiting for the sun to rise, possibly in love, throwing a stone into the ocean.

Okay, thanks for listening. I’m not sure about the availability of this book. It’s a strange publishing world out there now. Books can be “available” but “not in stock,” which is confusing and not gratifying. It might be completely out of print. At the same, you can usually find books in libraries or secondary markets if you are willing to click around for two minutes. I think it’s a good read. 

Thanks!

 

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